A figure of speech makes both for conciseness and for economy of mental effort on the part of the reader. To say in a personality sketch, for example, that the person looks "like Lincoln" is the simplest, most concise way of creating a mental picture. Or to describe a smoothly running electric motor as "purring," instantly makes the reader hear the sound. Scores of words may be saved, and clearer, more vivid impressions may be given, by the judicious use of figures of speech.
As the familiar, concrete objects introduced in figures frequently have a.s.sociated emotions, figurative expressions often make an emotional appeal. Again, to say that a person looks "like Lincoln" not only creates a mental picture but awakes the feelings generally a.s.sociated with Lincoln. The result is that readers are inclined to feel toward the person so described as they feel toward Lincoln.
Even in practical articles, figurative diction may not be amiss. In explaining a method of splitting old kitchen boilers in order to make watering troughs, a writer in a farm journal happily described a cold chisel as "turning out a narrow shaving of steel and rolling it away much as the mold-board of a plow turns the furrow."
The stimulating effect of a paragraph abounding in figurative expressions is well ill.u.s.trated by the following pa.s.sage taken from a newspaper personality sketch of a popular pulpit orator:
His mind is all daylight. There are no subtle half-tones, or sensitive reserves, or significant shadows of silence, no landscape fading through purple mists to a romantic distance. All is clear, obvious, emphatic. There is little atmosphere and a lack of that humor that softens the contours of controversy. His thought is simple and direct and makes its appeal, not to culture, but to the primitive emotions. * * * * His strenuousness is a battle-cry to the crowd. He keeps his pa.s.sion white hot; his body works like a windmill in a hurricane; his eyes flash lightnings; he seizes the enemy, as it were, by the throat, pommels him with breathless blows, and throws him aside a miserable wreck.
SENTENCES. For rapid reading the prime requisite of a good sentence is that its grammatical structure shall be evident; in other words, that the reader shall be able at a glance to see the relation of its parts.
Involved sentences that require a second perusal before they yield their meaning, are clearly not adapted to the newspaper or magazine. Short sentences and those of medium length are, as a rule, more easily grasped than long ones, but for rapid reading the structure of the sentence, rather than its length, is the chief consideration. Absolute clearness is of paramount importance.
In hurried reading the eye is caught by the first group of words at the beginning of a sentence. These words make more of an impression on the reader"s mind than do those in the middle or at the end of the sentence.
In all journalistic writing, therefore, the position of greatest emphasis is the beginning. It is there that the most significant idea should be placed. Such an arrangement does not mean that the sentence need trail off loosely in a series of phrases and clauses. Firmness of structure can and should be maintained even though the strongest emphasis is at the beginning. In revising his article a writer often finds that he may greatly increase the effectiveness of his sentences by so rearranging the parts as to bring the important ideas close to the beginning.
LENGTH OF THE SENTENCE. Sentences may be cla.s.sified according to length as (1) short, containing 15 words or less; (2) medium, from 15 to 30 words; and (3) long, 30 words or more. Each of these types of sentence has its own peculiar advantages.
The short sentence, because it is easily apprehended, is more emphatic than a longer one. Used in combination with medium and long sentences it gains prominence by contrast. It makes an emphatic beginning and a strong conclusion for a paragraph. As the last sentence of an article it is a good "snapper." In contrast with longer statements, it also serves as a convenient transition sentence.
The sentence of medium length lends itself readily to the expression of the average thought; but when used continuously it gives to the style a monotony of rhythm that soon becomes tiresome.
The long sentence is convenient for grouping details that are closely connected. In contrast with the rapid, emphatic short sentence, it moves slowly and deliberately, and so is well adapted to the expression of dignified and impressive thoughts.
To prevent monotony, variety of sentence length is desirable. Writers who unconsciously tend to use sentences of about the same length and of the same construction, need to beware of this uniformity.
The skillful use of single short sentences, of series of short sentences, of medium, and of long sentences, to give variety, to express thoughts effectively, and to produce harmony between the movement of the style and the ideas advanced, is well ill.u.s.trated in the selection below. It is the beginning of a personality sketch of William II, the former German emperor, published in the London _Daily News_ before the world war, and written by Mr. A.G. Gardiner, the editor of that paper.
When I think of the Kaiser I think of a bright May morning at Potsdam. It is the Spring Parade, and across from where we are gathered under the windows of the old palace the household troops are drawn up on the great parade ground, their helmets and banners and lances all astir in the jolly sunshine. Officers gallop hither and thither shouting commands. Regiments form and reform. Swords flash out and flash back again. A n.o.ble background of trees frames the gay picture with cool green foliage. There is a sudden stillness. The closely serried ranks are rigid and moveless. The shouts of command are silenced.
"The Kaiser."
He comes slowly up the parade ground on his white charger, helmet and eagle flashing in the sunshine, sitting his horse as if he lived in the saddle, his face turned to his men as he pa.s.ses by.
"Morgen, meine Kinder." His salutation rings out at intervals in the clear morning air. And back from the ranks in chorus comes the response: "Morgen, Majestat."
And as he rides on, master of a million men, the most powerful figure in Europe, reviewing his troops on the peaceful parade ground at Potsdam, one wonders whether the day will ever come when he will ride down those ranks on another errand, and when that cheerful response of the soldiers will have in it the ancient ring of doom--"Te morituri salutamus."
For answer, let us look at this challenging figure on the white charger. What is he? What has he done?
By the three short sentences in the first paragraph beginning "Officers gallop," the author depicts the rapid movement of the soldiers. By the next three short sentences in the same paragraph beginning, "There is a sudden stillness," he produces an impression of suspense. To picture the Kaiser coming up "slowly," he uses a long, leisurely sentence. The salutations "ring out" in short, crisp sentences. The more serious, impressive thought of the possibility of war finds fitting expression in the long, 64-word sentence, ending with the sonorous--"ring of doom,"
"Te morituri salutamus."
The transition between the introduction and the body of the sketch is accomplished by the last paragraph consisting of three short sentences, in marked contrast with the climactic effect with which the description closed.
PARAGRAPHS. The paragraph is a device that aids a writer to convey to readers his thoughts combined in the same groups in which they are arranged in his own mind. Since a small group of thoughts is more easily grasped than a large one, paragraphs in journalistic writing are usually considerably shorter than those of ordinary English prose. In the narrow newspaper column, there is room for only five or six words to a line. A paragraph of 250 words, which is the average length of the literary paragraph, fills between forty and fifty lines of a newspaper column.
Such paragraphs seem heavy and uninviting. Moreover, the casual reader cannot readily comprehend and combine the various thoughts in so large a group of sentences. Although there is no standard column width for magazines, the number of words in a line does not usually exceed eight.
A paragraph of 250 words that occupies 30 eight-word lines seems less attractive than one of half that length. The normal paragraph in journalistic writing seldom exceeds 100 words and not infrequently is much shorter. As such a paragraph contains not more than four or five sentences, the general reading public has little difficulty in comprehending it.
The beginning of the paragraph, like the beginning of the sentence, is the part that catches the eye. Significant ideas that need to be impressed upon the mind of the reader belong at the beginning. If his attention is arrested and held by the first group of words, he is likely to read on. If the beginning does not attract him, he skips down the column to the next paragraph, glancing merely at enough words in the paragraph that he skips to "get the drift of it." An emphatic beginning for a paragraph will insure attention for its contents.
REVISION. It is seldom that the first draft of an article cannot be improved by a careful revision. In going over his work, word by word and sentence by sentence, the writer will generally find many opportunities to increase the effectiveness of the structure and the style. Such revision, moreover, need not destroy the ease and naturalness of expression.
To improve the diction of his article, the writer should eliminate (1) superfluous words, (2) trite phrases, (3) general, colorless words, (4) terms unfamiliar to the average reader, unless they are explained, (5) words with a connotation inappropriate to the context, (6) hackneyed and mixed metaphors. The effectiveness of the expression may often be strengthened by the addition of specific, picture-making, imitative, and connotative words, as well as of figures of speech that clarify the ideas and stimulate the imagination.
Sentences may frequently be improved (1) by making their grammatical structure more evident, (2) by breaking up long, loose sentences into shorter ones, (3) by using short sentences for emphasis, (4) by varying the sentence length, (5) by transferring important ideas to the beginning of the sentence.
Every paragraph should be tested to determine whether or not it is a unified, coherent group of thoughts, containing not more than 100 words, with important ideas effectively ma.s.sed at the beginning.
Finally, revision should eliminate all errors in grammar, spelling, punctuation, and capitalization. Every minute spent in improving an article adds greatly to its chances of being accepted.
CHAPTER IX
t.i.tLES AND HEADLINES
IMPORTANCE OF HEAD AND t.i.tLE. Headlines or t.i.tles, ill.u.s.trations, and names of authors are the three things that first catch the eye of the reader as he turns over the pages of a newspaper or magazine. When the writer"s name is unknown to him, only the ill.u.s.trations and the heading remain to attract his attention.
The "attention-getting" value of the headline is fully appreciated not only by newspaper and magazine editors but by writers of advertis.e.m.e.nts.
Just as the striking heads on the front page of a newspaper increase its sales, so, also, attractive t.i.tles on the cover of a magazine lead people to buy it, and so, too, a good headline in an advertis.e.m.e.nt arouses interest in what the advertiser is trying to sell.
A good t.i.tle adds greatly to the attractiveness of an article. In the first place, the t.i.tle is the one thing that catches the eye of the editor or ma.n.u.script reader, as he glances over the copy, and if the t.i.tle is good, he carries over this favorable impression to the first page or two of the article itself. To secure such favorable consideration for a ma.n.u.script among the hundreds that are examined in editorial offices, is no slight advantage. In the second place, what is true of the editor and the ma.n.u.script is equally true of the reader and the printed article. No writer can afford to neglect his t.i.tles.
VARIETY IN FORM AND STYLE. Because newspapers and magazines differ in the size and the "make-up" of their pages, there is considerable variety in the style of headlines and t.i.tles given to special feature articles.
Some magazine sections of newspapers have the full-size page of the regular edition; others have pages only half as large. Some newspapers use large eight-column display heads on their special articles, while others confine their headlines for feature stories to a column or two.
Some papers regularly employ sub-t.i.tles in their magazine sections, corresponding to the "lines," "banks," and "decks" in their news headlines. This variety in newspapers is matched by that in magazines.
Despite these differences, however, there are a few general principles that apply to all kinds of t.i.tles and headlines for special feature articles.
CHARACTERISTICS OF A GOOD t.i.tLE. To accomplish their purpose most effectively t.i.tles should be (1) attractive, (2) accurate, (3) concise, and (4) concrete.
The attractiveness of a t.i.tle is measured by its power to arrest attention and to lead to a reading of the article. As a statement of the subject, the t.i.tle makes essentially the same appeal that the subject itself does; that is, it may interest the reader because the idea it expresses has timeliness, novelty, elements of mystery or romance, human interest, relation to the reader"s life and success, or connection with familiar or prominent persons or things. Not only the idea expressed, but the way in which it is expressed, may catch the eye. By a figurative, paradoxical, or interrogative form, the t.i.tle may pique curiosity. By alliteration, balance, or rhyme, it may please the ear. It permits the reader to taste, in order to whet his appet.i.te. It creates desires that only the article can satisfy.
In an effort to make his t.i.tles attractive, a writer must beware of sensationalism and exaggeration. The lurid news headline on the front page of sensational papers has its counterpart in the equally sensational t.i.tle in the Sunday magazine section. All that has been said concerning unwholesome subject-matter for special feature stories applies to sensational t.i.tles. So, too, exaggerated, misleading headlines on news and advertis.e.m.e.nts are matched by exaggerated, misleading t.i.tles on special articles. To state more than the facts warrant, to promise more than can be given, to arouse expectations that cannot be satisfied--all are departures from truth and honesty.
Accuracy in t.i.tles involves, not merely avoidance of exaggerated and misleading statement, but complete harmony in tone and spirit between t.i.tle and article. When the story is familiar and colloquial in style, the t.i.tle should reflect that informality. When the article makes a serious appeal, the t.i.tle should be dignified. A good t.i.tle, in a word, is true to the spirit as well as to the letter.
Conciseness in t.i.tles is imposed on the writer by the physical limitations of type and page. Because the width of the column and of the page is fixed, and because type is not made of rubber, a headline must be built to fit the place it is to fill. Although in framing t.i.tles for articles it is not always necessary to conform to the strict requirements as to letters and s.p.a.ces that limit the building of news headlines, it is nevertheless important to keep within bounds. A study of a large number of t.i.tles will show that they seldom contain more than three or four important words with the necessary connectives and particles. Short words, moreover, are preferred to long ones. By a.n.a.lyzing the t.i.tles in the publication to which he plans to send his article, a writer can frame his t.i.tle to meet its typographical requirements.
The reader"s limited power of rapid comprehension is another reason for brevity. A short t.i.tle consisting of a small group of words yields its meaning at a glance. Unless the reader catches the idea in the t.i.tle quickly, he is likely to pa.s.s on to something else. Here again short words have an advantage over long ones.
Concreteness in t.i.tles makes for rapid comprehension and interest.
Clean-cut mental images are called up by specific words; vague ones usually result from general, abstract terms. Clear mental pictures are more interesting than vague impressions.
SUB-t.i.tLES. Sub-t.i.tles are often used to supplement and amplify the t.i.tles. They are the counterparts of the "decks" and "banks" in news headlines. Their purpose is to give additional information, to arouse greater interest, and to a.s.sist in carrying the reader over, as it were, to the beginning of the article.
Since sub-t.i.tles follow immediately after the t.i.tle, any repet.i.tion of important words is usually avoided. It is desirable to maintain the same tone in both t.i.tle and sub-t.i.tle. Occasionally the two together make a continuous statement. The length of the sub-t.i.tle is generally about twice that of the t.i.tle; that is, the average sub-t.i.tle consists of from ten to twelve words, including articles and connectives. The articles, "a," "an," and "the," are not as consistently excluded from sub-t.i.tles as they are from newspaper headlines.